Dude I fucking love this character and game so much already and it's only version 1. I enjoy the dialogue options that are reminisce of dragon age 2 dialogue choices, the voice acting is amazing (man do I wish I could sound like him), the animations are smooth, and best of all the MC just has me laughing my ass off at unexpected moments. I was on the verge of tears when the intern took down those big furry creatures and he just lost his shit with them because the hulking behemoths of muscle were taken down by a girl with a pistol who was a fucking intern! Keep up the awesome work classy lemon honestly can't wait for the next update.
[v0.1] = Good start. Very short so far. I've seen much worse comedy writing, but humor is such a subjective thing.
Pros: + I like that I can pick dialog options other than sarcastic "humor" + Animations and voice acting is top-tier. You nailed the effective eye-contact during the android scene. The minor shifts of her pupils really brings the character to life. + Static scenes for dialog are still fluid and full of interesting background details that don't distract too much. + Effective story hook. I feel 100% vested in the plot.
Concerns: ~ The Comedy It isn't super cringe, but IMO, there's a bit too much of the "low-effort" gags. The secret base is literally labeled secret base, the mercenary store is labeled mercenary store. The forbidden door is labeled forbidden door. ha. ha. Get it? Seriously, you have a good framework and some interesting character setups. I've said it above, humor is subjective, but I feel some of the LOOK HOW RANDOM WE ARE parts partially undo the believability in your world-building. They are speed-bumps that dumb everything down and pull me out of your story. The honorable group of amulet hunters is a great example of what works for me. There's a set up, there is thought put into them, they have a purpose, and their antics aren't over-the-top cringe.
All this being said, it's still light years ahead of many other visual novels I've found on this site in terms of attempted humor. Take my criticism/advice, or leave it. It is all my opinion anyway.
Negatives: - No unforgivable sins other than I wish this was farther along. Just enough content to make me feel shocked/disappointed when it ran out. [v0.1]
"The secret base is literally labeled secret base, the mercenary store is labeled mercenary store. The forbidden door is labeled forbidden door. ha. ha. "
This is the most annoying nitpicking I think I've ever seen about a game. Could you not find something to criticize besides that?
It's the only thing worth criticizing, IMO. It's low-effort writing. This constructive criticism is under all the wonderful pros listed and followed up with: "All this being said, it's still light years ahead of many other visual novels I've found on this site in terms of attempted humor."
Believe it or not, I'm trying to help the publisher with my honest opinion about what did and didn't work for me personally, not nitpick. They directly asked for feedback.
Perhaps internet message boards are not the best place for you, emotionally.
You made another good one here (loved After the Inferno as well). The humor is on point, and I'll definitely be following this one closely. Keep up the good work!
The humor in this game is great. Wasn't familiar with your work before this but if the quality of this is anything to go by I'll definitely be checking out After the Inferno! Can't wait to see more and how the story will progress!
I think i'll like it less than after the inferno. The comedy part of it is a bit too much for my taste. Still, great animation, cute girls, and the story doesn't seem bad either...
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Very interesting game, and I have enjoyed playing!
Dude I fucking love this character and game so much already and it's only version 1. I enjoy the dialogue options that are reminisce of dragon age 2 dialogue choices, the voice acting is amazing (man do I wish I could sound like him), the animations are smooth, and best of all the MC just has me laughing my ass off at unexpected moments. I was on the verge of tears when the intern took down those big furry creatures and he just lost his shit with them because the hulking behemoths of muscle were taken down by a girl with a pistol who was a fucking intern! Keep up the awesome work classy lemon honestly can't wait for the next update.
Cheers man, glad you found it funny :)
[v0.1] = Good start. Very short so far.
I've seen much worse comedy writing, but humor is such a subjective thing.
Pros:
+ I like that I can pick dialog options other than sarcastic "humor"
+ Animations and voice acting is top-tier. You nailed the effective eye-contact during the android scene. The minor shifts of her pupils really brings the character to life.
+ Static scenes for dialog are still fluid and full of interesting background details that don't distract too much.
+ Effective story hook. I feel 100% vested in the plot.
Concerns:
~ The Comedy
It isn't super cringe, but IMO, there's a bit too much of the "low-effort" gags. The secret base is literally labeled secret base, the mercenary store is labeled mercenary store. The forbidden door is labeled forbidden door. ha. ha. Get it?
Seriously, you have a good framework and some interesting character setups. I've said it above, humor is subjective, but I feel some of the LOOK HOW RANDOM WE ARE parts partially undo the believability in your world-building. They are speed-bumps that dumb everything down and pull me out of your story.
The honorable group of amulet hunters is a great example of what works for me. There's a set up, there is thought put into them, they have a purpose, and their antics aren't over-the-top cringe.
All this being said, it's still light years ahead of many other visual novels I've found on this site in terms of attempted humor. Take my criticism/advice, or leave it. It is all my opinion anyway.
Negatives:
- No unforgivable sins other than I wish this was farther along. Just enough content to make me feel shocked/disappointed when it ran out.
[v0.1]
Cheers man. Thanks for the feedback! :)
"The secret base is literally labeled secret base, the mercenary store is labeled mercenary store. The forbidden door is labeled forbidden door. ha. ha. "
This is the most annoying nitpicking I think I've ever seen about a game. Could you not find something to criticize besides that?
It's the only thing worth criticizing, IMO. It's low-effort writing. This constructive criticism is under all the wonderful pros listed and followed up with:
"All this being said, it's still light years ahead of many other visual novels I've found on this site in terms of attempted humor."
Believe it or not, I'm trying to help the publisher with my honest opinion about what did and didn't work for me personally, not nitpick. They directly asked for feedback.
Perhaps internet message boards are not the best place for you, emotionally.
"It's the only thing worth criticizing, IMO. It's low-effort writing." Which is it? Is there nothing worth criticizing or is it low effort?
???
You don't seem to understand words.
So, I guess I will wish you the best of luck.
was gonna write something similar to this. so I might aswell just like your post and hope that it stays up for people to read
Great game.
Very promising start! I'm liking the story so far and the humor and animations are great. Can't wait for the next update!
So far so good. Sci-fi setup is nice and not so seen in adult game here.
Good So far. The comedy adds a fun element can't wait to see how the story develops
Really good, i like this game and your job, can't wait for the next update..
It's good, but a little bit too much on the funny side for me.
Really good
might be my first comment on this website - gotta admit, clever dialogue, great animations. keep up the good work.
Not commenting a lot.
But the humour in this one is really good. Had a blast playing.
Great start! I'm really excited for this!
:D
You made another good one here (loved After the Inferno as well). The humor is on point, and I'll definitely be following this one closely. Keep up the good work!
Cheers man, glad you liked it!
What I want to know is how is he going to eat that pizza with his mouth covered like that? XD
The humor in this game is great. Wasn't familiar with your work before this but if the quality of this is anything to go by I'll definitely be checking out After the Inferno! Can't wait to see more and how the story will progress!
Cheers, glad you found it funny!
This some good game my guy. Keep it up!
Thank you! :)
I think i'll like it less than after the inferno. The comedy part of it is a bit too much for my taste. Still, great animation, cute girls, and the story doesn't seem bad either...
Seem to be interesting. Downloading it now. Thanks!